Thursday, April 13, 2017
WALT Organised texts, using a range of structures.
Tom true heart
I was in a cold forest all alone but I was a brave boy and I had a golden sword. As I was walking across the crackle leafs a big snowball hit my head Awwwww. The leafs were as brown as mud. I can hear birds chirping and I can smell the damp snow. The trees were as tall as a giraffe's neck.
Before long I whistled to my bluebird. My bluebirds name was Zoe.
“ I said fly me to the troll's kingdom.”
“ My bird said yes.”
We went up in the sparkly blue sky. The clouds were as white as slim paper. We went around the troll’s kingdom and looked in a window. I saw my six brothers and their princess brides locked up in jail.
I hopped off my bluebird and jumped in the troll’s kingdom. Then I grabbed my golden sword out of pocket and pointed it at the troll’s and they fall asleep.
“ I said Billy, James, Jack, Zac, Jordan, Ngakita where are the huge golden key.
“ My six brothers said on the big red table.”
“ I said ok.”
Brother’s i’m a size of a thumb I can’t climb this big red table.
“ My brothers said no there’s a small brown ladder.”
“ I said ok.”
I started climbing the small brown ladder. The ladder was as small as a baby bird. When I got on the red table I grabbed the huge golden key. I jumped off the big red table and I put the huge golden key in the hole and finally I have my six brothers back and their princess brides. My six brothers picked me up together and gave my a massive hug.
Me and My six brothers and then princess brides hopped on my bluebird and we flew to the crackle leafs. We Saw the sparkly blue sky. The sky was as sparkly as a crystal diamonds. We landed On the crackle leafs. The leafs were as crackle as a red fire. My brothers and their princess brides were like
“ I’m finally home.”
“ I said I know I i’m glad.”
Finally I’ve got my 6 brothers back.
WALT write a narrative through the eyes of the children or one of the soldiers.
Beyond the lines
Beyond the lines
Suddenly war had started so we hopped on the massive ship. The ship was rusty around the outside. The ship was cold like freezing ice. The ship was getting warmer as we were huddling. I heard waves smashing against the ship. We were huddling because we were scared. We were scared because it was a unknown space and because we didn't know what was happening and we thought we were going to get hurt and killed.
We finally arrived at Turkey’s beach. The ramp slowly went down for us to run off. We ran as fast as we could. We ran into a puddle and got smashed. The puddle was as blue as the ocean. I smelt salt coming from the puddle as I’m running. Some people hid behind a brown rusty barricades and some people were killing other people. I barricades were as rusty as a old car.
I quickly wrote a message to my Wife and Grandson’s.
“ I said I love you both my battle has started. “
I kept running up the steep hill as I got cut by the barbed wire which was as sharp as a knife. The barbed wire was as grey as elephant skin. It was tangled up like spaghetti. One of my friends got shot in the leg and had a big wound. The wound was big and was pouring with blood. The blood was sticky and gooey.
I heard guns shooting and people screaming because killing was happening. The Turkey people wanted to win because more of us was killed. As we were battling our Captain was making our trench. The trench was big.
One of the bombs came down and blew up and killed someone from Turkeys team. The Turkey people were sad because they had lost their Captain and this made them fight even harder.
I send another message to my Wife and Grandson’s
“ I said war is almost finished I was be back in 5 days.
Thursday, March 23, 2017
WALT:Vary my sentence beginnings, structure and length
In the days of the arctic circle it was getting colder and colder as I was spinning the crank handle to grow my fruit. The crank handle made a squeaky noise as I was turning it. Later that day my juicy apples started to grow. I took the juicy apple off the breach and ate it.
As I was turning around a yellow magic box appeared. Then I ran over to the yellow magic box and touched it. When I touched it I got a shock of yellow and my hands and arms turned sparkly orange. Before long I hit the brown tree with my sparkly orange hands and arms and more juicy apples grew. I took off another juicy apple and took one big bite and then threw it on the ground.
After taking one big bite of my juicy apple I turned around and saw the yellow magic box move. As I took steps the box moves as well. When the yellow magic box started getting faster I started running. I skidded in front of the yellow magic box. However I jumped on the yellow magic box and it disappeared. My hands and arms were orange and I stood up and my feet turned into yellow boxes. Then I fell down and turned into a yellow magic box.
My neighbour came out of his house and started spinning the crank handle. The crank handle made a squeaky noise as I was turning it. Later that day his juicy apples started to grow. Billy took off the juicy apple and ate it. Then he saw a yellow magic box and Billy walked over to it. Billy got a shock of yellow. After Billy touched the yellow magic box his hands and arms turned sparkly orange. Before long Billy hit the brown tree with his sparkly orange hands and arms and more juicy apples grew. Billy kept eating his juicy apples. Billy went back in his house.
I was greedy but Billy wasn't greedy.